Ethos: I am a older, successful man who has experienced similar feelings as the audience. The audience is a teenager boy who is contemplating suicide.
Pathos: I am trying to evoke sympathy, fear, relativity.
I think that your speech conveys the desired ethos and pathos for the most part. I think that the story becomes less relatable though when you talk about your Mom dying from the heart attack. It is just a little too coincidental. But liked everything else and I thought you did a good job.
I think you did a really good job with the ethos and pathos. While listening to your story I felt all the things that you listed for your pathos. I think that maybe you should have something else that changed your mind about committing suicide. Maybe have an event that is a little less dramatic happen for you to realize that committing suicide is not the right thing to do. I think you did a really great job and the mom thing is the only thing you should work on.
Eric: I sort of see what you're getting at here, but I'm not sure I'm seeing the ethos and pathos. You call this kid a potential "murderer" at the end, and I'm not sure that this would do much to help someone who's contemplating suicide.
If you want to convince me that you are feeling just as "I" am feeling right now (suicidal), you need to take more time laying this out. Why were you feeling this way? what did it feel like? you need to do more to make it clear that you understand how I'm feeling.
And with the pathos, you need to re-think this a bit. If I'm angry at the world and am thinking about taking my own life, I'm not sure that I'm going to care that it might harm those around me. I'm mad at those people--so I probably WANT to hurt them...right? You've got an interesting scenario here, but it needs more thought.
I think that your speech conveys the desired ethos and pathos for the most part. I think that the story becomes less relatable though when you talk about your Mom dying from the heart attack. It is just a little too coincidental. But liked everything else and I thought you did a good job.
ReplyDeleteI think you did a really good job with the ethos and pathos. While listening to your story I felt all the things that you listed for your pathos. I think that maybe you should have something else that changed your mind about committing suicide. Maybe have an event that is a little less dramatic happen for you to realize that committing suicide is not the right thing to do. I think you did a really great job and the mom thing is the only thing you should work on.
ReplyDeleteEric: I sort of see what you're getting at here, but I'm not sure I'm seeing the ethos and pathos. You call this kid a potential "murderer" at the end, and I'm not sure that this would do much to help someone who's contemplating suicide.
ReplyDeleteIf you want to convince me that you are feeling just as "I" am feeling right now (suicidal), you need to take more time laying this out. Why were you feeling this way? what did it feel like? you need to do more to make it clear that you understand how I'm feeling.
And with the pathos, you need to re-think this a bit. If I'm angry at the world and am thinking about taking my own life, I'm not sure that I'm going to care that it might harm those around me. I'm mad at those people--so I probably WANT to hurt them...right? You've got an interesting scenario here, but it needs more thought.